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While. Avoid the indiscriminate use of this word for and, but, and although. Many writers use it frequently as a substitute for and or but, either from a mere desire to vary the connective or from doubt about which of the two con­nectives is more appropriate. In this use it is best replaced by a semicolon

The office and sales-rooms are on the ground floor, while the rest of the building is used for manufacturingThe office and sales-room are on the ground-floor; the rest of the building is used for manufacturing

Its use as a virtual equivalent of although is allowable in sentences where this leads to no ambiguity or absurdity

While I admire his energy, I wish it were employed in a better cause.

This is entirely correct, as shown by the paraphrase

I admire his energy; at the same time, I wish it were employed in a better cause.

Compare:

While the temperature reaches 90 or 95 degrees in the daytime, the nights are often chilly.

The paraphrase shows why the use of while is incorrect:

The temperature reaches 90 or 95 degrees in the day­time; at the same time the nights are often chilly.

In general, the writer will do well to use while only with strict literalness, in the sense of “during the time that.”

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